What do you think of this poster I made?

[van_wilder]

i think yun mga pics sa website nyo magandang gamitin for marketing... ganda ng mga kuha... lagyan natin ng konting drama... ma-inlove yun mga tao sa donuts mo...

[OTO]

Comment pls

[OTEP]

Nagutom ako, lalo na dun sa Donut sa bandang taas.

[mikaztro]

Difficult to read the brand
Hard to say what product you are selling
Need more object in the middle of the rays to fill up the space a bit more.
Make the P120 a bit more simple. Simple font if possible.

Overall....good layout!

[mikaztro]

Better! Yummy!

[CVT]

Better!

Tamang-tama sa kape ko ngayon. Wala bang "we deliver"?


:starwars:

[just4u]

okay po bang ilagay sa upper left corner ang brand name ng donuts tapos iyong price ilagay sa right corner(lugar ng box).. di po ba puwedeng i-retain ang background na yellow ng original poster?...para may association na sa unang poster .... ang ganda ng colors ng donuts...kakagutom

[IIE]

Click on the pic to full size. Comment what you dont like.

as my opinion lang po. malaki ang space sa gitna, put some icons, drawing, or images, and also put some text para mabuo ang body. plus, separate the company name (comp name nga ba? "hoppies") put something more "landi" ika nga para mabili ang dozen kesa sa per pcs. just only a opinion.

this better 'but' there's a box on the right corner, pedeng text a wrap outside the donut, para image type.

[NazQ]

2 cents ko lang po..
- take the box away from the corner.. try another angle of the box (maybe diagonal), put it on the background.
- lose the shadows on the the donut. try to blend it better
- put the hoops or hoopies sign instead on the lower right hand corner. hopefully bigger cause someone who has bad eyes might go to dunkin or go nuts instead. hehe.

[Kikkomann]

Bakit wala akong ma-view?

[Helios]

Comment pls

Sir,
- Point of Sale material ito so put emphasis on "Product Branding" (Hoops logo etc should be apparent)
- add another donut for consistency, overlap if necessary
- crowding for space (almost at the edge), minimize size of some graphics
- mask the donuts well (no hard/dark edges)
- put shadow only if the bg has no frame/border
- position either one of the wordmarks (assorted... or Sugar...) to the opposing side for design balance
- the wordmark is the selling key point so direct the eyes towards it by changing its color
- is the bag a neccessary element? if yes then incorporate it with the donuts as a suggestion

these are just improvements for an already great concept you have in there

[OTO]

Thanks for the advice guys any other suggestions? I'm having problems emphasizing that this poster is selling larger-sized doughnuts. I was thinking emphasizing the smallness of the box as compared to the doughnut.

[baiskee]

Sir,
- Point of Sale material ito so put emphasis on "Product Branding" (Hoops logo etc should be apparent)

agree. i would suggest put the logo instead of the box at the bottom right corner.

- add another donut for consistency, overlap if necessary

correct. box of 6 but we could only see 5 donuts. overlap or reduce size to accomodate another piece.

- reco to put a colored font
- di ko type yung red border, parang nakakasakal sa lay-out mo.... siguro no border na lang or light colors tapos shadows na parang nahuhulog yung mga donuts. hehe sorry, pinapakialaman ko na yung concept.

[OTO]

Thanks to all for the suggestion. I made some of the suggested adjustments. So what needs improvement?

[Chip]

wala na ba talagang pag-asa na mapalitan yung sperm/ghosts? sorry makulit ako hehe

yung "donuts" looks like it was lifted off a dunkin donuts logo

i like the way the donuts in the photos look btw, nakakagutom

[IIE]

Thanks to all for the suggestion. I made some of the suggested adjustments. So what needs improvement?

bro, as my opinion, ano purpose ng "BIGGER" sa upper left side?

bro, magstart ka from top to bottom pag dating sa design, dapat may ulo, then body, then paa

ano ang bigger??
sayang, na-etsupera yun logo mo sa ibaba, may fly away design pa naman na "hoops"
also put donuts sa gitna na sya ang iyong binebenta. background lang yun donut e.
alisin mo na din yun red background, for me sumisikip lang ang design/poster.

just my opinion. (wag po sanang magalit)

[OTO]

This poster is ment to promote a bigger-sized doughnut over the earlier "Hoopies". Keep all the suggestions coming. I appreciate feedback especially negative ones.

[OTO]

I'm having problems emphasizing that this poster is selling larger-sized doughnuts. Anyone care to make a suggestion on how I can say this is the "bigger doughnut" without resorting to saying XX% bigger?

[Helios]

I'm having problems emphasizing that this poster is selling larger-sized doughnuts. Anyone care to make a suggestion on how I can say this is the "bigger doughnut" without resorting to saying XX% bigger?

sir O,
I presume red border is part of the branding am I correct? Understandably you want consistency but sometimes thinking outside the box may just solve your prob in the design process.

1. anyways, add a red band at the bottom tall enough to cover the company logo & "sperms"(ref to what some pips said) if you want to retain the red border. It will not only visually magnify the company logo, but at the same time create the effect of your donuts getting bigger while falling off from a white background.

2. if the big donuts are only part of this particular promotion then you might as well change the wordmarks to something like
Assorted Big Donuts p110 box of 6, get my drift?
if it's totally a separate product line then a good violator like the strip on a corner will be effective. Black is not visually a good color for violators. Instead of a black strip, create a l.blue wavy strip like a flag (ref to hoops logo) and add your text which should be more definitive than simply the word "bigger"

3. Sharpen the donuts to bring out the tiny surface details and sheen while soften the edges. The edges look grimy.

4. The graphics are way too much at the edge, you might encounter some problem in the printing.

so far so good

[OTO]

Some additions. Pls critic and I'm thinking of putting a person leaning on the doughnuts holding a sign saying "Now Bigger"