What do you think of this poster I made?

[OTO]

Click on the pic to full size. Comment what you dont like.

[Jun aka Pekto]

You might want to add "Save" when buying a dozen. My first impression was your math was off. But, I got your drift a second later.

[OTO]

I was debating about the "Save P24" but i was concerned it'll get cluttered & confusing.

[Horsepower]

maybe you could also do away with the P12 per piece thing.

since it's 120/dozen they'll realize their savings once they're in

[Flagg]

Excellent play on red and yellow. But I'm thinking that under the P120 wordings and over the mid-to-bottom part of the sunburst, maybe there should be some kinda white oval violator inside of which are a pic or 2 of donuts.

I agree with sir Jun that there should be another violator of some sort that says "Save P24!"

The per piece price star looks kinda sheriffy to me, maybe more points or a splash effect?

No need for the 'for' at 'for a dozen'.

Finally, the poster is a little too 'hot' on the eyes. Maybe a little blue or green on the bottom to cool things off as well as a more organic, curvy borderline at the bottom where your logo's at.

Nice work, btw.

[nugundam93]

+1 on poster too hot on the eyes. :D

[bunge]

oooopss.. donut pala yan.. kala ko hopia na ala eng bee tin..

[scarab]

...lagyan mo ng isang irresistible pic ng donut, pang contrast sa loud colors.

[oldblue]

hoops donut customer mo? sarap nyan

[NazQ]

kung around the store lang naka dikit yung poster ayos lang. pero kung sa ibang lugar baka pwede kang maglagay ng pics nung products (i.e. a box of open donuts), i'm not sure kung familiar ang lahit with the product e. just my 2 cents..

[Eismann]

Freetaste sa mga tsikoteer, suggestion lang.

[jim]

i kinda like it. the colors can effectively attract the eyes. good work!!!

[GlennSter]

i like the colors!

[ILuvDetailing]

My 0.02...

You should put a picture of your product, a bigger picture, there's too much open space in the middle. Although you have a picture at the lower right, its not enough, too small.

[badkuk]

i have to agree with the earlier posters, imho there should be a donut somewhere on the poster; baka di kasi magets na tao B)

[baludoy]

nawala yung poster. wala ako ma-click. sayang

[Chip]

same comment with the others.
the product should be easily visible. at first i thought it was some kind of junk food

[baiskee]

some minor builds:
- bigger branding
- put shadows to add depth from the background

ok...nice layout. ;)

[OTO]

To everyone: thanks for the feedback and here is the update. still no box of 12 pcs donuts cause naubusan agad. Will try again to get a shot of the 12 donuts tomorrow. I was a bit wrestles so I did another config with the feedback I got. If I didnt incorporate your suggestions I may do so in a later time when I got the box of donuts. Some suggestions dont work w/o the box of donuts.

Without a due pls critic again. I need negative feedback to improve & be effective. BTW I missed out the "for a dozen" would've made it "a dozen"

[OTEP]

Maniwala ka kay baiskee, trabaho niya iyan.